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Some think that increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Nowadays, while some individuals think that increasing the
trades
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 and communications between
countries
 is an important issue,others deny it and believe
this
 way leads to disappear the identity of
nations
.In
this
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i
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 will outline why more contact between
nations
 is a necessity these days.
First
 of all,by increasing business
contacts
 between
nations
,
countries
 could use and take patterns from the latest devices and technologies that each other claimed.For ,instance some
countries
 that they suffer from drought-like
iran
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 could use some other
nations
 that invent some devices and methods to decrease the wasting of water in Dubai.
Furthermore
, by increasing these
contacts
 ,residents could follow and know better other
nations
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 cultures and traditions so
in
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apply
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order that people could communicate better
to
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 each other.
For example
 , Iran increased it,s
contacts
to
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russia
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Russia
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that
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 is actually one of the biggest
countries
 in the world.so in
this
 case when an
iranian
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 resident manage to visit Russia,
,
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fortunately
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 he or she could communicate in a better way with the natives and their culture in
russia
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Russia
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,
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 because he/she had some knowledge about them and their behaviour. To sum up, in my ,opinion societies have to communicate in
wide
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 range
to
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 the other
countries
 .in spite of increasing these
contacts
 leads to the disappearance of national identity but I think its advantages overweigh the drawbacks of
this
 issue.
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