It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that it is too costless to admin old
building
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, and
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funds should be allocated to the construction of modern
buildings
. Regarding
this
, I strongly disagree with
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.
This
essay will outline why
old
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the old
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building
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buildings
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should be remained and suggest other factors that should be taken into consideration.
To begin
with, old architectures have a historical value as memorial
significances
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significance
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. Not only can they embody comfort among citizens, but they may
also
contribute to keeping national identities.
For example
, the government institution in Korea that was built when Japan conquered Korea has been repaired in order to illustrate the persistence and resistance of Korean ancestors. As the example clearly illustrates, old
buildings
play a key factor in maintaining national identities. Another noteworthy thing is that old
buildings
have esthetic meaning that tempts foreign tourists. At the same time, a significant number of inhabitants rely on
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for their living.
For instance
, recent media in Cambodia reports that
although
almost old
buildings
lost the purpose of accommodation, most citizens want to keep these
buildings
since old
buildings
are an efficient means of tourism
that is
closely relative to
citizen’s
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living.   From my point of view, if governments increase entrance fees, it would solve the issue of repairing fees
of
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old
buildings
.
Moreover
,
implementation
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of harsher
regulation
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can
rise
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the awareness that visitors should follow rules well. What is more, penalties
also
can be used to maintain old accommodations. In conclusion, while repairing old
buildings
can sometimes be expensive, they have the historical and esthetic values that enable to maintain national identities and living.
Therefore
, governments should increase the entrance fees and penalties rather than making the modern ones.
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