Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, according to the data shared by the London Union of Teachers, 35% of
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high
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jobs. In
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discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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, as well as
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draft some initial conclusions. One of the most important benefits of working and studying at the same time
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is not only related to the possibility the
students
are having to earn experience earlier they start formally to work, but
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with a more attitudinal gain.
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to the undergraduates that don't work during they're in the high
school
, it has been shown that those who do it tend to have more sense of
responsability
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responsibility
as well as increased opportunities in the future. Of course, there are
also
some disadvantages.
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, it has been found that
students
who split their time between
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school
and their job are actually less focused
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this
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one and they are more likely to
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loose
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motivation to
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it. As some articles sustain, the earns these
students
got from their jobs, even if they are not so high, start representing a higher incentive than the
school
mainly because they allow them to start having a stronger sense of autonomy and independence from their parents. In conclusion, working while the young people
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studying is not per se good or bad, it
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of
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each individual and the plans
students
have for their future
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