Violence in playgrounds is increasing. However, it is important that parents should teach children not to hit back at bullies. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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been shown, violence in the majority of the playgrounds around the world
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been increasing considerably in the
last
year, but the way the parents are facing
this
problem remains anything but homogeneous. For some of them, their children should hit back at bullies, for others they should not do it. In
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disquisition, I will explicate why I actually agree with the
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ones by including examples and my own experience in the topic in order to add
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to the
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explanation
. On the
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hand, there are myriad reasons behind bullies'
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. The most prominent
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is that there is a strong motivation behind bullies to show themselves as stronger than their victims.
In other words
, they tend to perceive their victims as weak people
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whom they can take advantage
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to empower themselves in front of
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others. To elucidate
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, some articles published by The Times have explained that each time youngsters bully their peers they are trying to gain a
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of power and
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demonstrate
they are stronger than the rest of their mates
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so that the best way to respond to
this
attempt is to hit back them.
For instance
, when I was younger,
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of my classmates bullied me because
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appearance and it was not until I hit him that his harassment ended.
On the other hand
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is related to
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self-esteem. Bullies tend to focus on something
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insecurity about that. What happens is that we, as bullied people, internalize it and become insecure about ourselves.
Although
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process cannot be solved by hitting back
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aggressors, several studies have concluded that it has a positive impact
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our self-perception. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that violence is not going to be solved with more
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it is
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that sometimes works and the people who
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violentized
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violented
should respond to the intent in whatever way they can before they can be affected deeply
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