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Nature has more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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intelligence
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This
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First
 of all, people mostly rely on their own experiences rather than others. In
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 of well-known experts, it is said that
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 of a human originally is a blank slate, that everyone fills in according to their knowledge and experience. As it is known
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 is about the social relationships and the environment of a person and during
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 lifetime everyone witnesses certain events that are able
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change
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 of a person.
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, if a person fails on something, they will learn
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 mistakes and search
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 to solve them. They don’t know ways to solve it intentionally as it was with them from
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birth
, they learn things relying on their own incidents.
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, the environment and the way children were raised
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 an effect on their
intelligence
. The influence of factors
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 the education,
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upbringing
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 of a child has been proven by
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various studies.
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, studies that
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 been made with twins show that
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one of them
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ostly
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mostly
 has
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higher
intelligence
 than the other one due to school attendance and being raised separately from each other.
Also
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 it was found
taht
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that
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 child has a higher IQ, scientists suggest that it happens due to
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high expectations of parents and the huge amount of attention they pay
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that nurture affects more than
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nature
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an
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intelligence
 of a human.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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