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In the future all cars, busses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some argue that in the
next
 few years
cars
 are likely to be driven without humans.From my point of view, I think it can cause some negative consequences.
This
 essay will explain both advantages and disadvantages and give my own opinion.
To begin
 with,
driverless
 vehicles benefit society in various aspects.
Firstly
, the
driverless
car
 is more convenient.
This
 is because human does not need to drive a
car
 anymore.
Moreover
, it reduces the risk of accidents. Most
of
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the accidents are caused by the improvidence of the driver. Some drivers who take a high amount of alcohol have an opportunity to have a
car
 accident.
Therefore
driverless
cars
 can solve these problems in real situations.
This
 technology has no improvidence.
In addition
, it can not consume some alcoholic drinks. All of the problems that may be caused by
driverless
cars
 come from their program.
However
, the program is now tested in many companies to prove to their consumer that it has high security. Humans will be able to use it without a doubt in the
next
 few years.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks to
driverless
cars
. To elaborate,
driverless
cars
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cars
 can be driven by themselves but
people
 must beware when they are on the road. By the same token,
people
 will not pay attention to driving and think it is not necessary. In conclusion, From my point of view, a
Driverless
car
 is useful for
people
,
however
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people
 need to pay attention a lot when they are on the road.
In addition
,
people
 have to how to drive a
car
.Nobody will know if it has some unexpected situation.
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