People from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficulty to get university education. Some people think that the government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some argue that for now,
university
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in some countries are now free, providing for all their citizens, even though it costs extremely high. There are a number of beneficial aspects
from
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free
education
in
university
.
In contrast
, there are some drawbacks
for
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this
point.
This
essay will explain both sides of free
university
education
. On the one hand, free
education
benefits teenagers in various ways.
Firstly
, Free
education
reduce
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the cost
in
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family
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the family
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. Parents can use
this
part of
money
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to do something else, improving their welfare.
Secondly
, Teenagers who take a gap year will not be hardworking for the
university
fees. They can more prepare for the admission or take their time to learn themselves.
Finally
,
university
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universities
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are more attractive. Due to the free learning, all people who
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are interest
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interest
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with
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study can all join without
finance
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relation
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relations
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.
On the other hand
,
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there
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are some disadvantages
from
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free
education
in
university
. Certainly, universities will earn income lower than past. They do not take money from students. For
this
reason,
university
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the university
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will not have profits to manage the organization or
expanding
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any institutes.
Furthermore
, students who
enroll
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free
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in free
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course
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from the
university
. They may have
opportunity
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to retire more than one who
pay
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fees.
This
is because they feel like it does not their money
therefore
it would be no effects. In conclusion, in my opinion, I think free
university
education
benefits students. If the
university
education
is free, there will be a number of people who
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interest
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in
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.
In addition
, free
education
must be served
for
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person
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the person
a person
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who really needs it.
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