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Many people believe that nature plays a more significant impact on human adult intelligence, while others claim that an individual can train himself to become high-intelligent. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 consider that
people
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 can evolve high
intelligence
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 in themselves whereas others think that high
intelligence
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 is only a gift of
nature
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. I agree with the opinion that
intelligence
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 mostly depends on
nature
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.
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 essay will discuss why individuals
can’t
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 achieve high –
intelligent
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 skills and show some examples of naturally gifted
people
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 with high
intelligence
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. We can see a lot of successful and erudite
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 but without the mark of
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a ‘genius’
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 person.
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people
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person
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 may have very big knowledge in a lot of spheres but it is not
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 indicator of high
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, it is
only
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indicator
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an indicator
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 of hard work in some direction.
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 of
intelligence
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 (
IQ
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) of individuals may be little increased
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people
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 just have
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a limit
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limit
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limits
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 in their intelligent performance and not everyone is capable to be
genius
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a genius
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. Regular
individual
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individuals
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 with regular brain
structure
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structures
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can’t
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 achieve insane
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 and fated to normal
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 but it doesn’t mean that they
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 expand their knowledge and skills to insane indicators. Individuals who have high
IQ
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 are naturally gifted and differ from other
people
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, one of the smartest geniuses in human history – Leonardo da Vinci was gifted and was
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a different
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 breed. His brain structure, daily habits and way of living
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 not the same
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as regular
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’s. That
kind
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 of
people
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 who have really big
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IQ
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IQs
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are
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 just built
different
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 from regular
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 so
nature
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 gives them supremacy.
People
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 can develop their knowledge and evolve a lot of skills
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 regular
people
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can’t
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 achieve
same
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the same
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IQ
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 as geniuses. Intelligent
intelligence
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 is predetermined by
nature
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