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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy with everything and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this.

#people #home #workplace #place
It is believed that we should keep our
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home
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 and working place neat and clean with everything is organized at its own place. I
Opionate
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Opiate
 with the above statement.
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it says that one who
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 cleanliness keeps away diseases. As I am a health worker, I know the importance of hygiene and
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 role in
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the prevention
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 of infections
diseases
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and diseases
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.
To begin
 forward, some people like to clean as their hobby as it gives them pleasure and they spend their time very well.
Moreover
 at
workplace
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the workplace
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, it creates
such
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 environment that it
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enhances
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 their performance as well as
keep
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keeps
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 their mind relax. But some people, become highly obsessed with
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Cleanliness
. They cannot tolerate if a thing moved
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little
 bit from its original place. It affects their mental health. In the conclusion, it can be said that
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 hygiene have
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 own benefits but if people become highly obsessed with it, it can affect them mentally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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