Many people believe that nature plays a more significant impact on human adult intelligence, while others claim that an individual can train himself to become high-intelligent. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people assert that person can increase
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intellect by
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, but others think that
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adult intelligence is mostly influenced by
nature
. In my opinion, everyone can become high-intelligent training his mind and
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not
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factor in that way. Our
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is
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flexible and can accept
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of shapes,
also
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a brain
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can
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by hard training. Everybody
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supercomputer
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in their head that can change its form
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many ways. It means that
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being is capable to adjust its mind intentionally. Our
brain
is just billions of neurons and links between them
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built by our own actions.
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, 3 sisters of Polgar, one of the most famous persons in the chess world, are
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of
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. The sisters were growing
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around chess, and their whole childhood was only about playing chess. All sisters achieved admirable success in
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field. They proved that skill is
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the result
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of our environment and habits, not innate abilities. Everybody
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with
its
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specific physical odds including
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level. One person may have perfect memory, while another one
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issue
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with it.
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without hard work
on
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yourself
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. There are lots of examples,
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popular of them is Albert Einstein,
greatest
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physicist in the world. He was born with autism that confined him socially and he was unsuccessful at school. Despite
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health
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, Albert eagerly studied math and physics.
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of heavy learning, he became high-intelligent and establish new rules in the scientific world.
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cannot control
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but can train
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their own
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brain
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important role than
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person due to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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