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Nowadays people around the world are choosing to self-medicate rather than seeing a doctor and using conventional medicine. What are the causes of this change and what effects can be seen as a result?

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Presently, a large number of
people
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 are inclined towards taking
medicines
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as per
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 their own
instead
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 of consulting with a
doctor
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 and taking proper medical procedures.
This
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 approach has reasons
such
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 as
high
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 cost of
doctors
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'
appointment
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appointments
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 and
a
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the
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 need to perform many
test
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tests
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.
Hence
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, it has
adverse
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an adverse
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 impact on
people
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 by shifting them to high potency
medicines
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 and various organ
issues
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tissues
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.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 nowadays try to medicate themselves because taking an appointment
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 a
doctor
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 is a costly affair. To clarify, when
people
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 have to consult a
doctor
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, they need to pay an amount for a specific time and
this
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 amount is
same
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the same
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 for every visit.
In addition
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, before
strating
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starting
 a medicine course for any health issue,
doctors
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 always require
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a report
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report
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reports
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 of certain tests and these tests are like a burden on
people
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. A survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper in March
,
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 2015 in the UK that 65% of
people
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 left seeing a
doctor
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 or their procedures because self-medication was a cheaper option.
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, since
people
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 start to take medicine without any advice
of
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from
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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, they may not be able to understand the potency of
medicines
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.
As a result
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, they become habitual of high doses which harm their health situation in long run.
Moreover
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, taking medicine without expert advice may be a reason
of
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for
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 organ failure as most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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oral
medicines
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 are
notsuitable
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not suitable
 for digestive organs.
For example
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, taking
pain-killers
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painkillers
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 or multivitamins without
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doctors
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doctors'
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 advice can damage
liver
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the liver
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 and
kidney
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kidneys
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. To conclude, though
people
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 are interested
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in
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into
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in to
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 self-medication, they can save a lot of money from
doctors
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' appointments and tests;
however
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,
this
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 trend is not a welcoming one as it can cause many health issues and organ failure.

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