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Band 6.5

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours Suggest what should be done about the problem.

Dear Sir, With due respect, I
am harry
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, a resident of William Street Colony, Brisbane. Through
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 letter,
i
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 would like to draw your attention
towards
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to
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 the improper working of
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rubbish
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the rubbish
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collection
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 system in my area. At the onset, there are two main reasons behind the failure of
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 system.
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, as
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 staff is not punctual, they have no fixed time to collect the
rubbish
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.
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, the vehicle, which they use to collect the
rubbish
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, is too small to collect the
rubbish
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of
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from
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 more than twenty houses.
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, my neighbours and I are facing issues to
cleaniness
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cleanliness
 as almost every house has more than three bags of waste materials.
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 to it, untimely
collection
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 of
rubbish
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 is a serious issue because we have to wait for
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rubbish
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a rubbish
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collection
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 van for many hours which
restrict
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restricts
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 our regular
works
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work
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.
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, I request you to look into
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 matter personally and issue a fixed time on
daily
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a daily
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 basis to collect the
rubbish
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 in our area.
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, if you permit a new
rubbish
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collection
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 vehicle to our area, it will be really helpful to resolve the issue. Look forward to your favourable response
on
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this
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 letter. Yours Faithfully, Harry

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