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In some countries, people who are unemployed receive a sum of money each week in the form of a benefit, while some support this, other people believe that this money should not be given. Discuss both points of view and give your own point of view

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Unemployed individuals receive some unjustified
money
 every week in many countries. While some
people
 believe that
this
money
 should not be given but others support
this
 issue. I completely would not think that it is justified. Governments should not give any
money
 unless something unexpected event
such
 as health problems. Because being jobless is their own preference.They can
work
 like everyone. These viewpoints will be outlined in detail before concluding.
To begin
 with, as long as some countries give a sum of
money
, many societies do not want to
work
.
Therefore
,
this
 situation causes to do not develop any countries. If a
country
 does not have any productive
people
,
this
country
 is doomed to go back.
For instance
, If governments give
money
 to productive individuals rather than unemployed
people
, their
country
 will be able to improve fastly. Not only contribute to their
country
 and
also
 they can set an example to all globe.
On the other hand
, with increasing jobless salary, the
country
 which can give
money
 will take a lot of immigrants. Because most of the population wants to move to
such
 a
country
.
For example
, in my
country
, Syrian citizens are taken
money
 by the government even though they did not
work
. I think that citizens should
work
 to it deserve ,
Otherwise
Add a comma
,Otherwise
show examples
 they should go back to their own
country
. To sum up,
people
 who do not
work
 any job should not be given a sum of
money
. Because Unemployment is not a choice, it is a necessity.
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