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Nature has a more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Now many
people
 are arguing about the educated or innate intellectual in a person. And now the question arises about what carries the intellectual abilities of
people
. Some
people
 who have discovered new innovations are grateful for
this
 innate thinking, and some have been honing their abilities for years. I believe that any qualities need education and development, and
therefore
 I completely disagree with the opinion that thinking is about nature and not education. Some believe that high thinking is due to the genes of
people
. When someone discovers an innovation, many see it as the merit of nature, not learning. I do not support
this
 statement, since innate talent or thinking can disappear without constant training, and because of
this
, we cannot ignore
people
 who have brought up
this
 feature in themselves. Any feature or property must be honed and developed to achieve the goals.
That is
 why the qualities brought up in a person play a role more than the ones they have been brought up
,
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 since a person who has brought up some qualities in himself is in a constant search for something new.
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