In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is crucial for people in some countries to have their own

house

rather than

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rent one. The factors of

this

phenomenon are noteworthy and discussable. From my perspective, having own

house

has some merits, but the demerits cannot be ignored. Admittedly, holding own

houses

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can not only be considered

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a social sign or a condition in some respect

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but

also

enhance people’s safety to some extent in

this

day and age.

First

of all, in some countries, the stereotype and

myth

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affect people to suppose that buying

own

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house

is necessary.

For instance

, for a man in an age of marriage, it can be

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top-tier scrutiny for his would-be spouse.

Besides

, it

also

can be recognized as a person having

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stable finance. Another, possessing own habitation can

fulfill

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the mental

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security. Despite renting a room or

house

that provides a safe space as well, as a tenant, people take the responsibilities responsibility

for

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of maintaining the landlord’s properties and bear the broken utility, which uplifts the mental burden when it occurs randomly.

On the other hand

, it cannot be denied that owning a

house

has its drawback. One of the pitfalls is that the underlying problems are not easily

being

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found before moving in.

In other words

, a(the)

house

owner may take a risk against the problems showing up in the following year or even the rest of

the

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life.

Second

, the unreasonable price of houses is inevitable to buyers in contemporary.

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, it brings a knock-on effect on people’s thoughts that renting may be

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expedient in

this

plight. In conclusion,

although

having own

house

is important, I maintain my views that everything is a double-edged sword, so the disadvantages cannot be neglected.

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In a nutshell
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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
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control
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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, people now wear western-style dresses such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in childhood obesity, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In future all cars, buses, and trucks will driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicales outweight the disadvantages?

The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?