In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

It is crucial for people in some countries to have their own
house
rather than
to
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rent one. The factors of
this
phenomenon are noteworthy and discussable. From my perspective, having own
house
has some merits, but the demerits cannot be ignored. Admittedly, holding own
houses
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can not only be considered
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a social sign or a condition in some respect
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but
also
enhance people’s safety to some extent in
this
day and age.
First
of all, in some countries, the stereotype and
myth
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affect people to suppose that buying
own
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house
is necessary.
For instance
, for a man in an age of marriage, it can be
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top-tier scrutiny for his would-be spouse.
Besides
, it
also
can be recognized as a person having
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stable finance. Another, possessing own habitation can
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the mental
of
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security. Despite renting a room or
house
that provides a safe space as well, as a tenant, people take the responsibilities responsibility
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of maintaining the landlord’s properties and bear the broken utility, which uplifts the mental burden when it occurs randomly.
On the other hand
, it cannot be denied that owning a
house
has its drawback. One of the pitfalls is that the underlying problems are not easily
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found before moving in.
In other words
, a(the)
house
owner may take a risk against the problems showing up in the following year or even the rest of
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life.
Second
, the unreasonable price of houses is inevitable to buyers in contemporary.
As a result
, it brings a knock-on effect on people’s thoughts that renting may be
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expedient in
this
plight. In conclusion,
although
having own
house
is important, I maintain my views that everything is a double-edged sword, so the disadvantages cannot be neglected.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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