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Some people belive that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, imroving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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Some schools do Community Service for which they are not paid. Many
people
 believe that
such
work
 should be carried out in all schools. In
this
 essay, I will either agree or disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, I will talk about how it affects
student
 achievement.
Secondly
, how it develops
people
 in different areas of life. Students should volunteer
work
. After all, they help boost
student
 performance, encourage them to engage in these activities in the future, and can increase the level of happiness. A study titled "The Impact of Community Service on
Student
 Achievement in Massachusetts High School" by Pauline Kamara tells all of the above. The article says that
people
 who volunteered to
work
 were 7% more likely to report being very happy than those who didn't want to do it.
this
 is good because it improves their quality lives, which just motivates them to study well.
In addition
, the freshman can apply their skills in the classroom.
For example
, if a
student
 helped a community build a fence, they could apply what they learned about the perimeter of territory in math class to help them succeed in their studies. Giving is better than getting,
consequently
, it must be taught in educational establishments and teachers must explain that helping others is important for our society.
Moreover
, successful
people
 explain that an individual must do something free of charge for the general public which is the best way to become reached. In conclusion, we see that free
work
 has a good effect on pupils, and I fully agree with
this
 statement, based on the arguments I have given.
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