You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Science can become a powerful weapon if
countries
use it wisely. Some people think that it is good to share the
information
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other
countries
in scientific
research
, whereas some people believe that some
information
is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. In my opinion,
although
sharing
information
can benefit our society, it is a waste of budget for some
countries
.
First
of all, if all of the
countries
need to share their scientific
research
, other
countries
would choose to wait for the
information
.
This
means that the level of scientific
research
will decelerate since they can just wait for free
information
shared by other
countries
.
For example
, if a
country
can get the latest medicine which can cure Covid-19,
then
why that
country
would spend
huge
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amount of budget to develop the medicine
by
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their lab? It is unworthy to do
research
by themselves.
Moreover
, if
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scientific
information
should be shared freely
to
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other
countries
,
then
the method of producing nuclear weapons would
also
be shared equally. To be specific, all
of
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the
countries
would own nuclear weapons.
Therefore
,
this
might cause a disaster to our earth if there is a regional conflict or even a global conflict between
countries
. Once the
country
decides to bombard these weapons, it would cause a catastrophe to people, lands, and water.
Last
but not least,
although
most
of
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the
countries
, especially developing
countries
, can
be benefit
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from the free
information
, these
countries
would lose their competence at the same time.
Furthermore
, if the main
research
country
decides not to share the
information
freely, other
countries
would be restricted by the main
country
.
For instance
, since most of the counties in Africa need financial
aids
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, those
countries
become alleys in international conferences of the
country
which offers financial
aids
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them. To sum up, it is hard to deny that sharing
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information
in scientific
research
can increase
welfare
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the welfare
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of
whole
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society.
However
, I think
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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outweigh
advantages
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the advantages
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for many
countries
.
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