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These days some people argue that food should be locally produced and consumed instead of transporting it from fileds to markets. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the
contemperory
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contemporary
 society,
people
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 anywhere around the world are needy
of
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for
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 good and fresh
food
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items
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. Recently, a school of thought believe that locally
growing
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food
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items
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is
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are
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 better
to
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for
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consumed
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consume
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 by
the
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apply
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ordinary
people
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more
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apply
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than that
of
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marketing. In my opinion,I strongly
disgree
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disagree
 with
this
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 statement and in
this
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essay
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 I explain the
sorrounding
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surrounding
 reasons with examples. There are
Plethora
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a Plethora
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 of reasons
to
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for
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 my
disagreent
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disagreement
 of the statement . In the
arlier
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earlier
time
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 individual started agriculture for the existence of
thier
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their
 life and
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to fulfill
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fulfill
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fulfil
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 their daily need
of
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for
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food
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. But
noiw
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now
, the society changed a lot .
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, most
of
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the
agragarian
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agrarian
 country like
Indias
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India's
Indias'
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 economy is widely
depending
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dependent
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 on
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production
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the production
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 and marketing of
food
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items
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.
Moreover
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, it helps to increase the national income of
trhe
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the
 country
also
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.
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, according to the records of
statistical
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the statistical
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 department of India, it shows that the leading producer of wheat in India is Punjab and rice is in
state
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the state
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 of
AndhraPradesh
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Andhra Pradesh
. So, the marketing of
production
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 helps to sell the
items
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 locally and internationally and it
tend
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tends
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 to develop the
nations
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nation's
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 economic growth.
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, most
of
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the
people
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 are interested to do
white collar
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white-collar
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 jobs and some other professions.
Therefore
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, it is not possible to
growing
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grow
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food
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items
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 locally.
Furthermore
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, not only the
people
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 in cityside but
also
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 the consumers of locally produced
farmers
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.
However
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,
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this plenty
these plenties
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these
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there
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 plenty of local
production
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 of grains and vegetables together make most of the
countries
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country's
countries'
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agragarian
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agrarian
market
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markets
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 a profitable
one
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apply
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too.
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, the individuals in town and city have limited space to live and they are
depending
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ondepending
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 the local
farmers
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and
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apply
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at the same
time
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,time
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 the ordinary
producers
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producer's
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 main source of income is the marketing of produced
items
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 to the local markets and other national markets.
For instance
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, the
farmers
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 in
kerala
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Kerala
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 producing seasonal vegetables and getting high
yield
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yields
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 and
sells
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selling
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 to the countryside and other states help them to make
better
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a better
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 profit in 2021 than
2020
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in 2020
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 reported by Agriculture magazine. To conclude,
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production
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the production
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 and distribution of
food
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items
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 locally and widely help
farmers
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 and
economy
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the economy
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 to
a
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apply
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better growth and development. And it is consumed by the local
people
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 itself did not bring any use to the
farmers
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 and affects to the
countrys
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country
country's
 market too.
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