Your friend recently moved to the same town where you live. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter o describe why you go to this gym o say what part of this gym you recommend o explain why you think it is suitable for your friend

Dear Narmada, I'm very happy to know that you are in Sherbrooke now.I'm writing
this
letter to ask you if you can join me at the
gym
. Currently,I'm going to the Maxi Club ,
this
is the best
gym
that I discovered in the city, after trying a couple of them.
This
has numerous equipment with latest technologies, And
also
they provide well experienced personal trainers. with an affordable price of $120 per year.I find it less expensive with the facilities they have. As I mentioned they assist with the trainers and the price is all included you do not have to pay anything extra for the personal assistance.The greatest part of
this
would be the weekly sessions about the diet plans and nutrition recommendations that they provide in weekly seminars for all of their customers,
Additionally
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it has a swimming pool which you can use in the summers. I strongly believe
this
will be the best choice for you as well.Because I know you would love to go to the
gym
and be fit.
You
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always been looking for advanced equipment.It has all of them which meets up your requirement.
Moreover
, we both can go together and stay motivated.As you know I like spending time with you as we were doing in our college
gym
. I'll be waiting for your reply.See you soon. Shobha.
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