People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

The
Internet
nowadays is really well developed, we can search for everything
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anytime or anywhere.
As a result
,
people
today are always with their electronic devices
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since they are very useful. If we want to get information or learn about a country, we just need to search it on a website and we can learn about it.
Although
we can research and determine other countries' cultures and
life
by using the
internet
, we won’t experience what it really is like in real
life
.
Moreover
, sometimes the information that appears on the
internet
isn’t all true or maybe a few of the country's culture and
life
are mentioned and introduced to the world. As I said we won’t experience what it really is like in real
life
.
For instance
, the Mid Autumn Festival in China. Foreigners know that at
this
festival,
Chinese
people
eat a dessert called moon cake.
However
, they don’t really know what it means for the
Chinese
people
. For the
Chinese
,
people
it has a meaning of family unity
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because unity in
Chinese
is “tian yuan”. Mooncakes represent unity
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because “tuan” means dough and “yuan” is round, which totally describes a mooncake. If you search for these things, you will know
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but not feel
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.
In addition
, sometimes the information that appears on the
internet
isn’t all true or maybe a few of the country's culture and
life
are mentioned and introduced to the world.
For example
, everyone knows that in Guangdong they speak Cantonese, but what they don’t know is that not everyone knows how to speak Cantonese and maybe other
people
who aren’t from Guangdong can speak Cantonese better than
people
born in Guangdong.
Furthermore
,
people
said that
people
from the Southern Region can’t eat spicily. But many Southern Region
people
eat more spicy than Northern region.
Therefore
, I think that
although
we can use the
internet
to ascertain about lives and cultures in other countries, it’s better to travel there and experience it by yourself.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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