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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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We are currently having discussions centred largely on which factor global warming or
deforestation
 has the more deleterious effect on our planet. I would argue that global warming has a more detrimental influence on the environment. On the one hand,
deforestation
 has a
deleterous
Correct your spelling
deleterious
 impact on the earth. The spread of human habitation and organization is one of the main causes of
deforestation
. Even though, as the world's population grows, there is a need for more agricultural land.
Moreover
, some forests are destroyed by wildfires or overgrazing.
For instance
, an estimated 18 million acres of forest are destroyed each year. İn addition, logging operations cut down many
trees
 for paper production and woods. The lack of habitat for millions of species can result in the extinction of some species and in an ecological imbalance.
Thus
, it can cause an increase in global warming as there are not enough
trees
 to absorb greenhouse gases.
Trees
 are an essential part of the
water
 cycle.
Consequently
, less
water
 in the air means less
water
 is returned to the soil, leading to leading to soil erosion and barren land.
On the other hand
, global warming has a more devastating effect on the planet. Climate changes have resulted in temperature rises.
Moreover
, trapped carbon dioxide in the Earth’s atmosphere causes increased temperatures.
As a result
 higher temperatures are worsening many types of disasters, including storms, heatwaves, floods, and droughts. İn addition, the use of fossil fuels for industry brings about more carbon dioxide being produced. Transportation
also
 contributes to rises in harmful gases.
Furthermore
, these deleterious gases are not being sufficiently absorbed by
trees
 and plants. Global warming
also
 leads to
water
 shortages, increased fire threats, drought, weed and pest invasions, intense storm damage and salt invasion. İn conclusion, while ı acknowledge that
deforestation
 has a deleterious impact on the earth I would argue that global warming has a more detrimental influence on the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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