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the use of media is replacing face to face interaction among many people in society. Do you yhink the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

#media #face #interaction #people #society #yhink #outweight
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The amount of time
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 spend using applications to communicate online has significantly risen
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 decade
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 of which offline meetings are losing their popularity. Whereas social media is an efficient way to keep in touch as well as share news immediately, seeing each other face-to-face
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 sustain stable mental health. To my mind, there are many benefits of using modern technologies to maintain the connection. Nowadays, a great range of diverse applications exists that users exploit to cover any of their communicative needs. To start with, using messengers parents are always aware of where exactly their children are. If
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 a way of communication had been invented earlier, there would have been fewer mothers and fathers who were overwhelmed because they were petrified not knowing why their children were not at home.
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, not only is it possible to save time tackling working problems online, but
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 take courses throughout the world. Utilizing special computer programs which allow connecting any part of the world,
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 gain command more efficiently by having classes with the most knowledgeable specialist from all over the world.
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, the consequences of constant staying online might be destructive. As
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 do not meet each other in real life but just through the camera, serious mental disorders might occur. Since
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 are less socially engaged in interacting via social media the level of users who suffer from depression has rocketed over a few years. All things considered, I believe the usefulness of using social media in order to interact with each other trumps the downsides. While mental issues are likely to appear
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 of being online for a long time, social networking sites can be exploited to open limitless opportunities.
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