One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantage of this development outweighs the disadvantages?

Today, the unprecedented advancements in the medical healthcare system result in the

phenomena

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that people’s lifespan is significantly increasing.

Although

there is a concern that

this

issue probably causes many detrimental influences

to

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societies, I firmly believe

this

development could create more merits than its demerits.

To begin

with, people arguing that the increasing

life

expectancy brings several drawbacks have their own reasons.

Firstly

, the most noticeable evidence is that people

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longer means there is a gradually rising need for doctors, nurses and especially medical equipment and facilities. As a consequence, governments have to consider spending an astronomical extra budget to support and fund the treatment costs as well as hospital resources.

Besides

, not everyone can afford

first

-class treatment.

In other words

, the poor class may not have a chance to access these advancements.

On the other hand

, it is actually a miracle for those who can approach the improved medical care system. At an individual level, having longer longevity means that people have more time to enjoy their

life

. They probably spend extra time

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and

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places they have never been to before or just

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care of their offspring. And at a nation's economic level, any country having an ultra-modern methodology in treatment always has more stable and developed

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. When people’s average

life

span increases, the retirement age would probably rise as well and

hence

they have more time for dedicating and making profits to the marketplace.

Besides

, their precious experience in working and communicating is a valuable and inspirational thing to be shared with youngsters to motivate them to reach greater achievements. To sum up, despite some aforementioned downside, the improved developments in the medical healthcare sector have undoubtedly decreased the fatal

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diseases's

diseases

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rate in the whole world and brought us a better quality of

life

.

As a result

, the elderly are currently no longer a serious burden as before.