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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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In recent years, the influence of television and computer games in our society is one of the most problems that many scientists, psychologists, and governments debatable subject and
also
 are most questions interesting lots of
TV
 News. As the newspaper recover that many people think modern entertainment making us more aggressive and violent in real life. But I believe that having a conclusion and solving the problems.
Firstly
, we often see
TV
 was for some busy day or chill out not necessarily lead to copying it. According to New York City, criminal
behavior
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behaviour
show examples
 is not contained on
TV
 it is
also
 because of childhood treatment. All of these can be developed by some horror or bloody movie
Secondly
, the panic or bloody always increasing violence in cinema or games does not support the view that the shows we watch are responsible for crimes and violence.
Finally
, even if we are allowed to see and watch some movies, the instinct in our were outbursts so watching
TV
 or movies about that could help our Darkside control it easily.
For example
: killing enemies or monsters in our virtual world can relieve our need to demonstrate a dominant and cruel attitude in the reality. Overall, the difficulties of these problems were always here
although
 we accepted in reality that only depend on responsibility and some other effects If we look at the matter from
this
 perspective, the violent games and shows have the potential to make a positive contribution to the society and must be encouraged rather than banned.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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