Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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In recent years, the influence of television and computer games in our society is one of the most problems that many scientists, psychologists, and governments debatable subject and

also

are most questions interesting lots of

News. As the newspaper recover that many people think modern entertainment making us more aggressive and violent in real life. But I believe that having a conclusion and solving the problems.

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was for some busy day or chill out not necessarily lead to copying it. According to New York City, criminal

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because of childhood treatment. All of these can be developed by some horror or bloody movie

Secondly

, the panic or bloody always increasing violence in cinema or games does not support the view that the shows we watch are responsible for crimes and violence.

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, even if we are allowed to see and watch some movies, the instinct in our were outbursts so watching

or movies about that could help our Darkside control it easily.

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: killing enemies or monsters in our virtual world can relieve our need to demonstrate a dominant and cruel attitude in the reality. Overall, the difficulties of these problems were always here

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we accepted in reality that only depend on responsibility and some other effects If we look at the matter from

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perspective, the violent games and shows have the potential to make a positive contribution to the society and must be encouraged rather than banned.

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

People always believe that we could be a better person by using positive mindset. To what extend do you agree?

Some people think that art lessons, such as painting and drawing lessons, should be compulsory in secondary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disavdantages to living in a house compared with living in an apaartment?

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Due to the availability of fast food nowadays, many people have low-quality diets. What problems can this cause? What can governments do to resolve these problems?