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In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there are two perspectives some
people
 claim that the tv should not broadcast
sports
 events, and other
people
 say that television and other
media
 must cover
sports
,
this
 essay will check both views and I express my idea in the end. On the one hand, the progress of technology leads to we can see many events through of
media
,
in addition
, we location it does not matter,
also
, these technologies will cover almost everywhere around the world, as well as, some of the population who are interested in
sports
 can understand the result of a competition to easily,
furthermore
, not only different kind of
media
 helping community who have fond of sport for increasing knowledge of different
sports
 but
also
 the
media
 encouraged the community for starting a sport for reaching a healthy life,
otherwise
, we may be suffered to a different type of illness,
also
, the
media
 decided to improve our life through of many devices,
for example
, television and radio and satellite and something else, and I agree with
this
 topic that tv should covered
sports
.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 that disagree with
this
 subject, maybe for
this
 reason that
this
 leads to the anxiety of athletes but it is not a good reason, definitely,
this
 part of
people
 are very lower than before part. in conclusion,
this
 is good happened that the
sports
 broadcasting via
media
 can support athletes, I completely agree with
this
 topic, and
this
 welfare can help
people
 that know athletes and support them.
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