Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Experts around the globe in developed and developing countries have debated whether the
ultilization
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utilization
of sophisticated modern
technology
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,
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as mobile phones and
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pads
, has enhanced and improved our social life or whether the opposite has become the case. As evidenced by
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and online platforms like Facebook and Whatsapp, I firmly believe
technology
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brings
people
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together and
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our bondings with those around us. Some may argue that there is ample evidence that
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technology
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has
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detrimental
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effect on our mental well-being, especially for youngsters, who are easily affected by
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nature of
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.
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, cyberspace will cause
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further
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isolated
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from
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society
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, and our
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generation is unable to develop genuine social skills required for work and social life. Research by
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of Hong Kong has shown over fifty
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of
people
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spend far more time with mobile phones or online apps
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as Youtube, Facebook or Instagram than face-to-face communication with their families or friends.
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, it is conclusively clear that these technological advancements have diminished our
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interactions.
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, the multifold advantages of
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cannot
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.
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, family members in various parts of the world can meet in virtual meetings like Zoom, allowing them to connect freely and easily without geographical
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, which can enhance
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the feeling
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of proximity and closeness.
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, online platforms and chatrooms
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people
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with the same interest or hobbies together, allowing
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and discussions,
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and overcoming
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the barriers of race, time and distance. In times of lockdown during COVID,
people
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can communicate with their loved one via Whatsapp and Facebook,
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their sense of loneliness and isolation. All in all,
technology
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has tightened social bonding in our
society
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. To conclude, bonding between the family members,
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friends
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and various sectors of the
society
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has strengthened and grown because of the new development of
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. It is foreseeable that, with reasonable policies to address the threats due to overuse ,
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technology
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will allow our
society
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to flourish.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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