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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that precipitous global declines in
crime
 are principally down to developments in technology. While advanced technology admittedly plays
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 integral role in
crime
 reduction, I would argue education hits more directly at the cause of
crime
. The biggest argument in favour of technology’s impact is the advent of forensic science. In the past, forensics was an unreliable soft science that included notoriously
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 practices
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 as
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dental identification and blood splatter analysis. Over the
last
 couple of
decades
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 it has grown into a much more accurate tool. Courts now rely heavily on DNA testing, which is nearly 100% conclusive in most cases.
This
 has had a two-fold effect, allowing prosecutors to reopen and investigate cold cases as well as better prosecute and deter current criminals.
However
, education still more powerfully underpins decreases in
crime
 because it does more to eradicate
poverty
.
Poverty
 is far and
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 the chief cause of
crime
. Take
for example
 a country
such
 as China, which has developed rapidly in the
last
 30 years, elevating millions formerly below the
poverty
 line. Their economic rise has been followed by better educational standards which
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 trickled down into better employment opportunities for graduates. The
crime
 rate in China has plummeted simply because far fewer people have the basic motivation,
poverty
, to commit crimes. In conclusion, the impact of technology is negligible
next
 to educational reform, which undermines the deepest roots of
crime
. Forward-looking countries that prioritise education will
also
 reap benefits that extend well beyond the
crime
 rate
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