Many factured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Health
problems
are associated with Use synonyms
to consume
Change the verb form
consuming
sugar
and the process of manufacturing has the responsibility. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
people
need to consume less Use synonyms
sugar
and increasing the cost of Use synonyms
this
product could encourage them to less consume. In my opinion, I agree Linking Words
sugar
products have to be more expensive than healthy food.
A good reason to increase the cost of Use synonyms
sugar
products is Use synonyms
decreasing
obesity in society. At the present, many obese Change the verb form
to decrease
people
have cardiovascular Use synonyms
problems
and Use synonyms
this
causes other associated Linking Words
illness
like depression, as a consequence, it will increase the rate of suicide being a big problem for countries. Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
For example
, many researchers said that if Linking Words
people
consume less Use synonyms
sugar
, Use synonyms
a human beings
could have better mental health. Correct the article-noun agreement
human beings
a human being
Furthermore
, another benefit is the quality of life would be better for everyone.
Another point to consider is countries could have a diminished rate of diabetes. Linking Words
Moreover
, it is known diseases like diabetes contribute to Linking Words
people
having other Use synonyms
problems
increasing the Use synonyms
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Replace the word
blindness
on
Change preposition
of
people
. Use synonyms
In addition
, the major benefit to society is having less public spending investing money in Linking Words
people
to encourage the practice of sports and saving money on medicaments and increasing Use synonyms
people
could eat more food without Use synonyms
sugar
like vegetables. Use synonyms
For example
, if a country has less amount of Linking Words
people
with the disease, could have more happy Use synonyms
people
reducing mental Use synonyms
problems
.
In conclusion, encouraging Use synonyms
people
to have a low Use synonyms
sugar
consumption could get Use synonyms
the
big benefit for society and I agree that the cost of products with Correct article usage
a
a high levels
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a high level
high levels
sugar
ought to be expensive.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite