Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People hold different views on whether children should be taught to compete or co-operate.
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it is true that children can learn a lot from competition, I do think that collaboration is the ability
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for our future adults and for our society. On the one hand, kids should learn how to deal with failures with good grace when falling short in a rivalry. With sensitive and fragile egos, children will channel their sense of inferiority to others
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as bullying, which might be accelerated into more violent behaviour when they are getting older.
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, weathering the failure of competition with unconditional caring and proper guidance from teachers and parents, they will experience that one is still loved when defeated. That will
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instil an unshakeable belief in self-value which will protect them and
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future adults from doing detrimental things to overcome the sense of worthlessness.
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, even though there are valuable lessons that come from competition, I do think cooperation needs to be promoted more as it requires a set of skills including leadership, trust, and empathy on a cognitive
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an emotional level. These are all essential skills for good employees in the workforce.
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maybe free riders in a school project. It is easy to get agitated with them, but a good team worker will change perspectives and
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try to understand what matters to them and how to use it to motivate them.
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ability can transfer to a company's work environment when they grow up. In conclusion, I think young people can learn a lot through rivalry, yet, the ability to co-operate is more manifold and more important for future adults and can be never stressed too much.
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Ensure to clearly address all parts of the essay prompt. Make sure to state your opinion explicitly and provide a balanced discussion of both views.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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