Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is argued that the majority number of modern

people

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valued a Musician and an Artist less than a Scientist and a

Technologies

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essay agrees with the statement mentioned above because the scientist and the technologies made a significant impact in the modern society and

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, the attention of the young

people

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are mainly on the new

technology

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The

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apply

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Science and

the

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apply

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technology

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expects

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has

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done a huge awareness in the community.

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is to say that they obtain the discovery of new

technology

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that the society has been experiencing

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as cellphones, computers, and tablets. They

catched

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caught

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the heart of the

people

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especially

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the young generation and

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because

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this gadgets

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are well used today.

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, the cellphone almost all

people

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has

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been using

cellphone

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in their daily

living

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lives

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, the attentiveness of the

people

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were

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captured by

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modern

technology

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means that

the

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apply

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technology

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has a significant role in

modern

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world

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as easy access in

the

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peoples daily

living

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lives

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. They made the lives of

people

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as easy as possible because communication become easily available thru social

application

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applications

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facebook

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Facebook

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messenger, zoom, and

wechat

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WeChat

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, company meeting was effortless done at home because of the modern

technology

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provided with

application

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the application

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of zoom. In conclusion,

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essay supports the idea that the scientist and the

techologist

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technologist

are more valued

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than

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that

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than

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the musician and the artist because of

huge

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their huge

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influence

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the community and

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, the young

generation's

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generation

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heed

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the modernization.

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modern society
scientists
technology experts
musicians
artists
reliance
scientific advancements
practical benefits
driving economic growth
daily lives
culture
human emotions
express ideas
provoke thought
spiritual well-being
emotional well-being
preserving cultural heritage
subjective nature
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