Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It is argued that the majority number of modern
people
valued a Musician and an Artist less than a Scientist and a Technologies
. Fix the agreement mistake
Technology
This
essay agrees with the statement mentioned above because the scientist and the technologies made a significant impact in the modern society and second
, the attention of the young people
are mainly on the new technology
.
The
Science and Correct article usage
apply
the
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apply
technology
expects
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expect
has
done a huge awareness in the community. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
This
is to say that they obtain the discovery of new technology
that the society has been experiencing such
as cellphones, computers, and tablets. They catched
the heart of the Correct your spelling
caught
people
especially
the young generation and Add the comma(s)
,especially
also
because this gadgets
are well used today. Change the determiner
this gadget
these gadgets
For instance
, the cellphone almost all people
has
been using Correct subject-verb agreement
have
cellphone
in their daily Add an article
a cellphone
living
.
Replace the word
lives
Furthermore
, the attentiveness of the people
were
captured by Change the verb form
was
this
modern technology
. This
means that the
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apply
technology
has a significant role in modern
world Add an article
the modern
such
as easy access in the
peoples daily Correct article usage
apply
living
. They made the lives of Replace the word
lives
people
as easy as possible because communication become easily available thru social application
like Fix the agreement mistake
applications
facebook
messenger, zoom, and Change the capitalization
Facebook
wechat
. Correct your spelling
WeChat
For instance
, company meeting was effortless done at home because of the modern technology
provided with application
of zoom.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
the application
this
essay supports the idea that the scientist and the techologist
are more valued Correct your spelling
technologist
Correct word choice
than
that
the musician and the artist because of Correct your spelling
than
huge
influence Correct pronoun usage
their huge
to
the community and Change preposition
on
second
, the young generation's
Change noun form
generation
heed
Correct subject-verb agreement
heeds
to
the modernization.Change preposition
apply
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