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You are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter explain where you live describe the problem give reasons why you do not want this development

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Dear David, I am a resident living in Cook Street,
Airport
 Road, you can call me Ella, I am writing
this
 want to express my opinion with government explore
plan
 in our local
airport
. Since
last
 weekend local news published they are
plan
 building more facilities to increase the international flights, our community
residences
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 are
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 the crazy
plan
. As you know, there are
horriable
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horrible
trafic
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traffic
 jams
in
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airport
road
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 years issue, the city council useless
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 the
trafic
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traffic
 problem. What is more, they do nothing to measure
trafic
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traffic
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,
in contrast
, to explore
airport
 development. In my thinking of
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, we should
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 to consider how to improve the public
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traffic
 smooth as well as
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efficiency
, in the
next
, to
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discuss
 the
airport
 development. As your newspaper is our local voice, I trust you may want to know our local comments
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this
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 sincerely Ella
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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