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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
As we all know,
Railways
 are the fastest mode of Transportation than Road.
Now a days
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 as
people
is
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are
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 using private
transport
 as
a
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dignity in their life. all
of
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the
people
 think
thant
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that
 using public
transport
 is for poor
people
. Nowadays
luxuary
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luxury
 is a symbol that identifies the upper,
middle class
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people
. So most
of
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the
people
 will have cars even though they cannot afford
it
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them
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. The
Government
 should take measures to reduce the use of private vehicles. they should spend
money
 on public modes of transportation, by encouraging the
people
 from using public
transport
. from my point of view, the
railways
 do better as public
transport
. if the
government
 introduce speed trains , the public will be more likely to use them, to avoid traffic
in
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 the roads.
Also
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 the
government
 should introduce links like buses in some places near to the main streets or towns. So that it will
attact
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attract
 more
people
.By spending
money
 on
Railways
, it will increase the income to the
goverment
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government
, that most of the
people
 will depend on these. And each person will find it cheaper than using their own vehicles, in terms of fuel or gas, traffic and maintenance. And
this
 is very
time consuming
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 for them.
For Example
, I'm living in Qatar, and here
Goverment
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Government
 is encouraging
people
 to use public
transport
. They spend too much
money
in
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 the construction and maintenance of Metro trains. And it is
more
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cheaper and faster. And almost all the
people
 are depending on
metro
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the metro
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.
Also
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 they have metro-links that
connects
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connect
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 to certain areas, in which they have stops like bus stops. So spending
money
for
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railways
 by the
government
 is a good
desicion
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decision
 and it will reduce
trafic
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traffic
, sound pollution etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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