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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the participation of the adults in seven different
sports
 activities( Walking, basketball,
cricket
, Jogging, Gym, Football and Hiking) for two years 1997 and 2017. Overall, Gentle walking was the most popular sport for the given period of time, While the least popular game for the
year
 1997 and 2017 was basketball and
Cricket
 respectively. In regards
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the
year
 1997, Gentle walking accounted for 50,000 participants which was the highest
number
 compared to the other
sports
. Followed by that was Gym,
Hicking
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Hiking
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,Jogging and football which had a
number
 between 34000 to 35000. While the least popular
sports
 for the
year
 1997 were
cricket
 and jogging attracted only 28000 and 9000 participants.
On the other hand
, In the
year
 2017, the
first
 three popular
sports
 were Gentle walking, football and hicking with
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number
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 around 55, 48 and 49 respectively. While Jogging and Gym had the same participation
number
 of 35000 adults for each. Similar to the
year
 1997 basketball and
cricket
 were the least popular among the young crowd.
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