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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In many countries,
people
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 pay
taxes
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 to
governments
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. Some believe they should give high wages for public
services
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, whereas others think large
taxes
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 have negative impacts. From my point of view, society should not be given plenty of their
money
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 which results in problems in their lives. With a considerable amount in
people
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's salaries, authorities can provide numerous facilities for countries. They can provide society with outstanding
services
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 and develop the country and living standards.
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, a developed wealthy country
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 can renew public transportation by bringing modern trains to their cities.
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, more public buildings
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 as hospitals and schools can be constructed. These
services
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 and facilities can improve
people
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's lives and make them proud of their
governments
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.
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, provided that
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paid many
taxes
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,
people
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 would not have enough
money
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 to provide for their needs. The community has huge demands
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 as paying for bills, educational institution fees, food, and clothes.
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people
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 must prioritize spending their
money
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, they should have most of their wages to be able to provide for their necessary requirements. Many employees are not paid significantly;
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, if they give most of their salaries, they cannot apply them to their demands. I believe
governments
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 should consider individuals' problems in their lives and not give a lot of income. In conclusion, there are various opinions about the amount of
money
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 to give authorities
taxes
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. Many believe
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 amount should be high in developing countries'
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 and facilities.
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, others believe these high
taxes
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 cannot solve individuals' needs.
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