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'There should be no legal age for drinking.' Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#age #support
The USA has been known for its freedom of speech,
however
, that freedom should have a regulation especially, in terms of alcohol
age
 consumption. Since the
age
 for drinking is different in many
states
, the government may create a federal law that
states
 21 as the universal
age
 to drink. In
this
 essay, I will explain
this
 situation and
then
 show my point of view.
First
 of all, physicians say that young adults (18 years old) having alcohol consumption can interfere with the development of their brain’s frontal lobes, essential for functions
such
 as emotional regulation, planning, and organization.
For example
, during the Spring Break in the US, some
states
 had a considerable increase in the number of car accidents during that weekend. The individuals behind those incidents were people under 21. The noise had been so loud that different
States
 issued different red flags to the White House.
Moreover
, people under 21 would be drinking alcohol at home under adult supervision, for medical necessity, and other reasons even though
this
 may affect entertaining business. Parties which support the frontline argued that setting an
age
 might create new chaos that would
last
 not only for long weekends and in the future the situation could get out of control. To sum up, the Federal Government should take a look at all the data and take action because
this
 is having a huge impact on our teenagers. Listening to every party, with different specialists can help to get an agreement. In the
next
 few days, we’re gonna have an announcement from the White House.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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