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'There should be no legal age for drinking.' Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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The USA has been known for its freedom of speech,
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, that freedom should have a regulation especially, in terms of alcohol
age
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 consumption. Since the
age
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 for drinking is different in many
states
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, the government may create a federal law that
states
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 21 as the universal
age
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 to drink. In
this
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 essay, I will explain
this
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 situation and
then
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 show my point of view.
First
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 of all, physicians say that young adults (18 years old) having alcohol consumption can interfere with the development of their brain’s frontal lobes, essential for functions
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 as emotional regulation, planning, and organization.
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, during the Spring Break in the US, some
states
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 had a considerable increase in the number of car accidents during that weekend. The individuals behind those incidents were people under 21. The noise had been so loud that different
States
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 issued different red flags to the White House.
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, people under 21 would be drinking alcohol at home under adult supervision, for medical necessity, and other reasons even though
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 may affect entertaining business. Parties which support the frontline argued that setting an
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 might create new chaos that would
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 not only for long weekends and in the future the situation could get out of control. To sum up, the Federal Government should take a look at all the data and take action because
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 is having a huge impact on our teenagers. Listening to every party, with different specialists can help to get an agreement. In the
next
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 few days, we’re gonna have an announcement from the White House.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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