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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The
line
 chart illustrates the total music sale in three main sale methods namely Streams,
Downloads
, and
CDs
Purchase
. the vertical and horizontal axis
are
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 labelled as percentages and years to depict a time-series
trend
 of these methods. Overall, the proportion of sales via download and
CDs
purchase
 declined over the time given.
Conversely
, total music sales by streaming increased gradually. the trends of the two methods of streaming and
CDs
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CD
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purchase
 have an asymmetrical pattern indicating the rate of music sold by streaming is bullish whereas
CDs
purchase
 experienced a gradual abatement.
On the other hand
, the
trend
 of
downloads
 fluctuated over time and reached an apex of 43
percent
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per cent
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 in 2014.
Furthermore
, in the
last
 given year, the percentage of
downloads
 declined to the lowest point of 30
percent
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per cent
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. More precisely, the dotted green
line
 of
CDs
purchase
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purchases
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 shows a steady decline from the initial value of almost 55% to 25% in 2018.
In addition
, the dashed blue
line
 with its general increasing
trend
 started from the initial point of 5% and soared in 2018 to 42%. while the two approaches
of
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 sales experienced a steady increase and decrease over time, the red
line
 associated with the
downloads
 method amplified from the initial percentage of 35 to 43 in 2014;
however
, the
trend
then
 started to abate consistently to touch the percentage
line
 of 30.
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