Question:Today more people are overweight than ever before .what is your opinion are the primary causes of this?what measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic.

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overweight in recent years and it continues to increase unstoppably. One of the reasons that particularly I want to discuss below is fast food consumption.
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world economic
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give rise to unhealthy production and eating system. Let`s get be clear. As I mentioned above, food-beverage culture adapts to modern life and influences
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social behaviour. A person who lives in
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the system
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has to know the motto belongs our century is faster. ,
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it might have not been tolerated by others.
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always should catch the time. The culture was born called fast food for
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reason. Here is the key because of obesity. Being
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is taking time on the up and up. Contrary to
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be faster cooking dishes methods is frying which is most harmfully. For frying something -including
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we use sunflower or oil with additives. On the other ,hands it is easy to access for everybody and the cheapest way to nutrition. That`s why I believe status effect people`s nourishment.
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stop to gaining weight? In my opinion, we can produce
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healthy
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and quickly served them at the same time.
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another way, human standards should be remedied, kind of reach easily healthy nutrition. Those who will ensure
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are those who hold the administration.
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