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students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. what are the reasons and solutions for this issue?

#students #school #money
Recently, plenty of young children lack knowledge about financial management. I think that problem is caused by the
schools
 and the
parents
 not
teach
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 them and I believe that the
parents
 need to spend more time as well as the
schools
 put more attention on teaching them how to manage
money
.
To begin
 with, many teenagers lack the ability to manage budgets. For the
first
reasons
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reason
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, the teenagers who grow up in a rich
family
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families
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 with their
parents
, which means they have no need to worry about
consumptions
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consumption
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,
such
 as rental fees, bills, or
buy
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buying
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 food.
For example
, many of my classmates are
allow
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 to play all day,
seeing
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see
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a movies
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a movie
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,
going
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 to enmainments and
playing
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 games, because their
parents
 give them
everythings
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everything
, so they do not have to earn
salary
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a salary
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.
Additionally
, the
schools
 only pay attention
on
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to
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 young people's
achivements
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achievements
achievement
.
Schools
 care
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,
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As a result
, a rich environment makes teenagers not realize the
improtant
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importance
important
 of financial management.
Secondly
, saving
money
 and
a
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 important
of
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apply
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things of earning
salary
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a salary
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 can be taught by
parents
. As
parents
 play a severe role in children’s
life
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lives
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, they can educate their children
start
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to start
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 from small things.
For
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instead
, when the teenager demands a toy,
mother
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the mother
a mother
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 can make them do
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the house
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house work
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housework
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then
 get toys. In doing so,
younagers
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youngsters
youngers
younger
 can
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learn
be learning
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learning
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tolearning
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 manage
money
 from
small
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a small
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 age. To sum up, a large number of students’ finances rely on their
family
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families
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;
therefore
, they do not understand the
improtant
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importance
important
 of saving or earning
money
.
Hence
, It is important to educate them for life.
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