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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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Nowadays
people
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 tend to believe that academic achievements are the result of inborn
skills
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. It is considered that hereditary and environmental factors are both significant for
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 life.
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 mind Inborn thinking
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 are handed down from parents, play a noticeable role in determining an individual's
intelligence
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 level.
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 some characteristics of a human,
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 as
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, can be genetically predisposed.
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 proven fact is that certain genes are responsible for good thinking abilities. It can be clearly seen taking into consideration some families where all members have a high IQ.
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, good genes work only on a certain level, because thinking
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 must be improved by
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.   Nurture, which is a combination of environmental variables and a person's experience,
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intelligence
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 level. According to scientists, life-long learning is essential for everyone, because
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 how our brain can be trained and properly used. Without effort, relying only on inborn
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people
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 cannot accomplish their goals.
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people
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 knew that Albert
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 genes were fascinating, but did they know that he was raised in a difficult environment where he chose to test the limits of his
intelligence
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 and that was the reason for his success.   To conclude, for successful life both inborn and developed thinking
skills
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 are required. So
people
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 must keep learning and enhancing their power of mind throughout their life.
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