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most of our information comes from the internet are incorrect. do you agree or disagree.

#information #internet
It is argued that the
internet
 provides false information to us.
This
 essay disagrees with the suggestion
,
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 because the
internet
 has become very mature as compared to the old days.
Firstly
 we will discuss why some populations believe that info that the
internet
 providers are incorrect,
then
 we will talk about how information on the
internet
 is useful and how it helps people around the world. In the 1990s when the
internet
 has introduced the info which used to be published on the
internet
 had no way to verify or be corrected by others.
This
 leads to the belief among
folk
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 that the
internet
 provides false data.
Furthermore
, there are companies that use to do false advertisements on the web, due to which many people have lost their money. folk were not trusting the web because of the scam that was happening on the
internet
. For ,example a hacker used to create a false
product
 and used to sell it for a cheap price
then
 any customer trying to purchase the
product
, his credit card information was stolen.
However
, these issues of false data, hacking and selling can be under control when companies like Google, Microsoft, Wikipedia and Amazon came into the picture. Wikipedia came up with the solution to verify and approve any content publish on their website. Because of
this
 verified data is made available on the
internet
. Hackers have a difficult time fooling anyone because of the afford made by Google.
Although
 purchasing a
product
 is risky online, folk are buying a
product
 from the
internet
 ,Thanks to Amazon. In conclusion, modern technology is making the
internet
 a safe place and many advancements are coming to address the remaining issue on the
internet
. Trusting the
internet
 and virtual things will make people's lives faster and easier.
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