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More and more people are opting for readymade food instead of freshly cooked food. Does this practice has more advantages than disadvantages? Discuss.

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NOWADAYS, BECAUSE OF LIMITED AVAILABILITY,
TIME
 MANY PREFER TO CHOOSE PRE-COOKED MEALS RATHER THAN NATURAL CUISINE.
HOWEVER
, I BELIEVE
THIS
 TREND HAS ONLY A FEW BENEFITS AND MANY DRAWBACKS WHICH I WILL EXPLAIN IN DETAIL IN THE
NEXT
 PARAGRAPHS. THE MAIN POSITIVE ASPECT OF PACKAGED
FOOD
 IS SAVING
TIME
 IN
THIS
 RUSHED ERA. SELECTING
THIS
 SORT OF CANNED
FOOD
 IS THE MOST CONVENIENT WAY FOR SPENDING AS LESS
TIME
 AS POSSIBLE FOR PREPARING AND EATING
FOOD
. AS TODAY'S INDIVIDUALS WORK TOO MUCH THEREBY, THESE READYMADE FOODS ARE A PERFECT KIND OF
FOOD
 FOR OVERCOMING TO THEIR HUNGER IN THE FASTEST WAY.
FOR INSTANCE
, IN MY COUNTRY MANY SPEND THEIR LUNCHTIME
TIME
 IN THE WORKPLACE AND THEY RELY ON PRE-PREPARED PACKAGES AS IT IS THE EASIEST AND FASTEST METHOD FOR AVOIDING FROM HUNGER AND GETTING ENOUGH ENERGY TO RESUME THE REST OF WORK HOURS. DESPITE THE MAINTAINED ,BENEFIT THERE ARE SOME ISSUES IN SELECTING
THIS
Correct determiner usage
THESE
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 READYMADE
FOODFOODS
Correct your spelling
FOOD FOODS
. ONE MAJOR PROBLEM OF CONSUMING PRE-MADE CUISINE IS UNHEALTHINESS.
THIS
 SORT OF
FOOD
 NOT ONLY CONTAINS A CONSIDERABLE AMOUNT OF CHEMICAL INGREDIENTS BUT
ALSO
 THEY HAVE A HIGH AMOUNT OF FAT WHICH CAN RESULT IN OBESITY.
ALSO
, ANOTHER SERIOUS DOWNSIDE IS A HIGHER RISK OF
FOOD
 POISONING. MOST OF THESE PRE-COOKED PACKAGES WERE MADE IN UNCLEAN AND UNCERTAIN CONDITIONS WHICH
THIS
 PRACTICE MAY TREAT THE WELL-BEING. ALL IN ALL, PRE-PREPARED FOODS TEND TO HELP US IN SAVING
TIME
 IN COOKING BUT THEIR NEGATIVE ASPECTS
SUCH
 AS THE HIGH RISK OF
FOOD
 ILLNESS AND SOME HAZARDOUS CHEMICAL INGREDIENTS ARE MUCH MORE.
THEREFORE
, IT IS BETTER TO SELECT FRESH FOODS
INSTEAD
.
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