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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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Water
 is an essential element of human life.
However
, in several countries, people do not have access to
freshwater
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.
This
 issue generates some negative effects, which need to be resolved immediately, thence, the essay will discuss the issue thoroughly. One of the problems is the human body requires more drink than food for keeping body
health
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.
However
, nowadays,
water
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 crisis forces society to consume polluted
water
, which is contained some bacteria of diseases.
As a result
, waterborne disease is being popular in some
of
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developing nations.
For instance
, in Africa, kids dying due to diarrheal fever are increasing
for
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 the past years since the reduction of safe
water
 supplies currently
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. Another problem
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 to consider
that
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 the agriculture industry is threatened to fail.
This
 sector is necessary for irrigation of better yields, when an irrigation process is not able to feed crops, global hunger will probably occur.
For example
, in
long
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 drought, Indonesia has to find other options to irrigate the crops,
instead
, crop failure will probably occur. Regarding all difficulties mentioned above, there are several solutions
might
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 be taken.
Firstly
, the government must promote awareness of
this
 crisis among inhabitants. Through a massive campaign, people will probably notice how dangerous the topic is.
Hence
, the wastewater might be blocked. We can see,
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 every earth day, the authority addresses some steps to stop
water
 usage through multimedia, a new habit will appear if the socialization is held regularly.
Secondly
, scientists have to take a part succeeding
this
 programme by doing comprehensive research to increase groundwater. The goal is to find a new method
in
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 increasing
water
 supplies, specifically for human sustainability. To conclude, a massive campaign and thorough research will certainly be helpful for our future.
Nonetheless
,
this
 programme might consume
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 budget and time, which
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 to be
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. But, it will be worth trying as
water
 is
a
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 main necessity in human life.
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