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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #work #organization #life #organizations
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believes
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 that many
people
 stucks
life
 in working
same
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the same
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 firm
over
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 years and years which
experiences
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experience
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life
 in a robotic way that punches and strengthens their attitude and
will power
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willpower
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 with
self confidence
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self-confidence
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 in their professional accuracy.But many other ponder shifting their working atmosphere at regular periods might improve their efficiency and talents with amble remuneration which attracts the
people
 in
this
kind
 of mentality. It's more common that once a job is acquired by an employee these days he/she might try to stick on itself since any issue related to their calm mental attitude.
People
 can increase the
responsibily
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responsibility
 with remuneration on sticking to
same
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 firm over years that a company owner looks
upto
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up to
 for
advantage
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 of
an
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expert staff.
Entrepreneur
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Entrepreneurs
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moreover
,
likes
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 regular sticky staffs to entertain their business with.That
kind
 of bonding will terms to productivity in
bigger
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 state. Certain special
kind
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kinds
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 of
people
 are very much
borred
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bored
 and irritated in doing same work for more time regularly keeps them jumping
to
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from
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 one organization to
other
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another
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 one.
This
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kind
 of
people
are
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 not at all trustworthy as per my concern because these kinds of
people
 are always slippery in mind to step on to
next
 stage to build up
thier
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their
 own personal needs.So
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the employer
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employer
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employers
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 will look
them
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at them
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 according to that
kind
 of sight in promotions or increments. So in
state
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- all kinds of
people
 in the civilization live according to their mental attached job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
.They stay
happily
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 in
life
 with
thier
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their
 own
attrackness
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attackers
.One will enjoy his
life
 in their own
attractivness
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attractiveness
 and
hence
 organization differs with employments statics.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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