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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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With the development of technology and the needs of today's era, more and more people choose to use their mobile phones and computers to
work
 online from
home
.
This
 essay argues
that
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the advantages and disadvantages
about
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 working at
home
. The development of networking and intelligent tools
have
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brought a lot of convenience to our lives. With mobile phones and
computer
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computers
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, the
home
 can become a library, a school, an office and an entertainment
center
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.
This
 makes it possible to
work
 at
home
. Because all kinds of transactions, from banking to shopping, can be performed electronically, and all information, from train schedules to off-price merchandise, is as close as the press of a key.
However
, despite the increase in efficiency and convenience, the changes it
bring
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could very well lead to potentially adverse consequences. For instance, as nearly all activities and works could be conducted at
home
, we might all become hermit-like, never feeling any need to leave our houses.
This
 would be unfortunate because by becoming so addicted to the Internet, we might never be exposed to social interactions. From the preceding discussion, it is readily apparent that working at
home
 , as an increasingly popular way of working, has both its upsides and downsides. Admittedly, working at
home
 may be productive and useful.
However
, people who lack self-control,
such
 as adolescents, should try to avoid
this
 working approach, or their academic
work
 and social lives will eventually pay the
prices
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.
Besides
, adults should
also
 try to avoid only working at
home
, though the lack of face-to-face communication can improve
work
 efficiency in the short term,
but
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it is not conducive to
long-term
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 development of our career.
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