Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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What we wear may influence someone to act

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to dress up in smart suits. While

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the other group think their work performance is matter most. Personally, I firmly agree that how we manage ourselves at

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than our appearance, as it will influence to

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process.

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could bring

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two sides and my personal opinion. On the one hand, institutions might ask their workers to wear

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formal

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for several reasons.

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believe what they wear may influence

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their brand image. In another word, when they dress executively, clients will certainly think that they are intelligent and ready for handling every

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For instance

, a lawyer mostly wears neatly to show their clients that they are ready to overcome any problems.

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, some jobs require their workers to wear

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suit

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for showing their pride. As we know,

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, civil servants will always be asked to have a smart dress, which aims to show their pride as a part of regulation makers.

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, some industries allow their worker to wear casual

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for numerous opinions.

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get a free mind which could increase their creativity,

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, usually an architectural company that offers creativity, they have no regulation over their uniform as the company hopes to earn flexible

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, not stiffly. To conclude, in my opinion, we cannot deny that

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impression matter most,

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the person, especially for

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that

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meeting new people in their business process.

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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries levels of health and fitness are decreasing and average weights are increasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what are some possible solutions?

You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: • Say that you liked their photos of your family • Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event • Give them the details of the event.

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