In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It si therefore necessary for the government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Fast-food
Fast
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The fast
A fast
food
chain is the major cause of health
issues that vast
majority of Correct article usage
the vast
people
has
been suffering due to excess Correct subject-verb agreement
have
food
consumption. I agree that government
must implement a policy of paying high tax
on Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
this
type of food
. I will give my examples and relevant evidence in the ensuing paragraphs.
On the one hand, the health
sector of the government
must teach the public about
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apply
the
fundamental Correct article usage
apply
health
knowledge such
as food
consumption awareness to everyone so that they would be more responsible and well-versed on the proper way and rightful time basis of consuming junk foods. Like in Middle
East Correct article usage
the Middle
which
everything is Correct word choice
where
tax free
including Add a hyphen
tax-free
food
, almost 100 percent
of the population are Change the spelling
per cent
depending
their meal from wide Add the preposition
ondepending
ranges
of Fix the agreement mistake
range
fast
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fast-food
food
restaurants. As a result
, different forms of illness develops
and the Correct subject-verb agreement
develop
government
is suffering with
the influx number of patients in hospitals. Change the preposition
from
Therefore
once a policy implemented
, it would lessen the number of diseases Add a missing verb
is implemented
which
acquired from Correct pronoun usage
apply
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overeating
over eating
since Correct your spelling
overeating
people
would not spend money on the food
only instead
they need to budget their expenditures to
other commodities like water and electric bills.
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for
On the other hand
, Asian countries that are imposing high taxes on foods maintains
the optimum Change the verb form
maintain
health
status of its
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their
people
since their money is wisely budgeted. For instance
in Japan, both city and countryside dwellers are living frugally as well they are producing their own organic foods to put on their table for the reason that fast food
meal
are expensive. Fix the agreement mistake
meals
In addition
, they are not prone to any
diseases and capable of maintaining a healthy body throughout their lives. Correct your spelling
many
Hence
, the government
of Japan is mindful and helpful to its citizen.
In summary, government
is held liable for the Add an article
the government
health
of its people
by imposing high
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a high
tax
on Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
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fast-food
fast
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the fast
food
chain
. Fix the agreement mistake
chains
This
is the best way to prevent illnesses and maintain a healthy body throughout their life existence that
would benefit both Correct pronoun usage
which
government
and its community.Submitted by maymosqueda on
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