Some people think computers and internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Computer and
internet
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the lifeline for the
gobal
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global
connected
world
.
Although
internet
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the internet
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and online technology
has
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not yet reached
to
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each and every human in
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the globe
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but
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it is enough
widespade
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widespread
wide spade
wide space
to safely assume that it is almost
everyware
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everywhere
. Nowadays, because of
this
corona
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coronavirus
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virus
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pendamic
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pandemic
schools are being forced to continue via remote learning. As an aftereffect, in many parts of the
world
people have
experiancing
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experiencing
the pros and cons
about
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of
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this
new way of learning.
However
, some
individuls
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individuals
among us argue that in-person study is always better
then
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than
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online
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education
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eduction
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education
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and we should switch back to
original
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the original
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metod
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method
but most
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that we should keep utilizing
this
new way of study. Both sides have merits in their arguments but I believe that we should
contine
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continue
utilizing online resources for the
eduction
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education
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in schools in restricted menor. Let's
expolore
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explore
the bright side of it.
Internet
consist
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consists
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of
huge
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the huge
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amount of information, and by utilizing that,
students
get quick access to various ideas and share
own
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their own
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thoughts
over
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on
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the topic and share their knowledge across the
world
with other
students
, which will intern help them
coloborate
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collaborate
and
achive
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achieve
common goals.
Second
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objective
for
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of
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the
internet
and mobile
device based
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device-based
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learning is to reach
to
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apply
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students
in remote villages so that each child
get
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gets
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proper
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a proper
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education. During
this
pendamic
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pandemic
world
has started realizing the major advantage about
type
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the type
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of education. Previously,
this
thing came under
wants
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the wants
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list for that
world
but now
its
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it's
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unders
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under
needs
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the needs
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.
On the other hand
, so many people have started
experiancing
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experiencing
the worts side effect from connected studies.
Although
, many children have followed the do-as-directed path on
internet
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the internet
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guided by their
perents
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parents
or teachers, the
explorotory
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exploratory
nature
in
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of
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many
students
, has exposed
them
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the
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social
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to social
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media
network
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networks
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and
its
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their
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unwanted effect on their early childhood. The
internet
has many harmful materials, as well as people with malicious motives which can ruin the physical and
mantol
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mental
health of the student.
For example
, in many
contries
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countries
around the
globe
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,globe
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we have started noticing drastic
incriment
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increment
in cases related to online abuses.
Therefore
, we can argue that we should consider
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the long
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team impact on a
child
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child's
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future before blindly following the new way of study. In
concusion
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conclusion
concussion
, we can
definetly
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definitely
say that both views have valid arguments. In my
opinion
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need to
srutinize
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scrutinize
more on
this
subject before deciding
path
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a path
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forward. At least, we must monitor
user
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the user
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of
compupter
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computer
computers
and
internet
by small and teenager
students
with the help of their parents and teachers.
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