In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the World still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In today’s
world
, farming has been playing
significant
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role.Farmers have been
produce
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producing
produced
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lots of
products
and many
people
consume these.
However
,
people
around the
world
still go hungry because
of
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apply
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rich
people
want to consume too much without thinking
others
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about others
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.
First
of all, agriculture has been
suplying
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supplying
significant
products
but some
people
can not reach them.These
products
should be used by everyone but rich
people
do not prefer to
share
them with
others
.They think that
,
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rick
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rich
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people
should eat qualified
products
but
others
not.
Thus
,other
people
do not know about
agriculture
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agricultural
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products
or they had to consume bad
products
.
For example
, there is a movie which is about
this
subject
shows
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that shows
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how rich
people
behave
selfish
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selfishly
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.They do not
share
best
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the best
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goods,they
share
old foods.
Secondly
,
government
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a government
the government
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which is placed
for
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on
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rich
people
again do not act
regulations
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in regulations
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.They always behave for rich
people
bacause
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because
rich
people
have been working for
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government
govenment
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the govenment
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.There is a
ridiculus
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ridiculous
balance between government and rich
people
,
no body
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nobody
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think
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thinks
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about
others
.
Therefore
,
people
face
to
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serious problems in the
world
. In my opinion, the
world
is our
world
and we have been living together.We should not behave differently to
people
.We have to
share
our opportunities with other and we have to apply regulations which is beneficial for our
world
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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