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University Education should be free to eveyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or diasgree

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It is believed that
education
 expenses should not be based on
personal
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the personal
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 income it should be free for all.
This
 essay agrees with the suggestion because of the benefit it will bring to society.
Firstly
 we will discuss how free
education
 will empower the people who earn low wages in the community and
then
 we will see the positive effects an educated society brings to the world.
Education
 should not be restricted or limited to anyone and everyone around us should have access to free
education
. If schools and colleges are made free it will reduce lots of issues
such
 as theft, scams, community fights etc. An educated family can earn and spend more money on themself's which will
in turn
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 grow our country's economy.
For Example
 Norway in Europe has a free
education
 system. Due to
this
 the literacy rate of the country is 98% and the Crime rate is only 10%.
This
 made Norway's economy stable.
Moreover
, with
education
 a person learn how to be patient, respect everyone,keep their surrounding clean etc. Living in an educated community brings a positive change in our life.
Although
 people around you will be from
a different cultures
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different cultures
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 they still respect and support you.
For example
, Japan is one of the cleanest
country
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countries
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 in the world because tidiness is taught in earn years of school. Everyone cannot learn about tidiness unless
education
 is free for all. In conclusion,
education
 should be free for all to improve
standard
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the standard
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 of living and bring prosperity,happiness,
security
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and security
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 to our society.
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