Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
recent
Add an article
a recent
the recent
show examples
discussion
Fix the agreement mistake
discussions
show examples
of
crimes
, it has become
controversial
Add an article
a controversial
show examples
issue whether prisoners should
guide
young
children
about
bad
Correct article usage
the bad
show examples
effect
Fix the agreement mistake
effects
show examples
of committing
crimes
. On the one hand, researchers believe that
people
who already committed offences in society should teach the bad
affects
Replace the word
effects
show examples
of doing illegal activities to
children
.
However
,
on the other hand
, others believe that jailers should not
guide
such
things to teenagers. I partially agree with the given argument, and I will provide the substantiated reasoning in the upcoming paragraphs. To initiate, old prisoners should
guide
the
children
about the dangers of committing
crimes
in society. To put it another way, these
people
can
guide
in
better
Add an article
a better
show examples
way because they already experienced the punishments of doing offences and violations.
Moreover
,
such
people
can uplift
children
by guiding them
the
Change preposition
through the
show examples
loss of living away from families and good resources.
Furthermore
, they should teach them to be
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
good citizens as it would bring more peace in society, and they should
guide
them in doing volunteer activities that would keep them busy and benefits them in future.
On the contrary
, the
people
who committed
crimes
in past should be kept away from young
people
.
In other words
, pupils can learn bad things from them.
Besides
,
children
could get ideas from
such
people
, and they would have
bad
Correct article usage
a bad
show examples
impact on their lives.
Also
, it is said that
people
learn faster in their childhood. If pupils would get to know about
crimes
Change preposition
at in
show examples
in
Correct your spelling
an
show examples
early age, they can commit that in future.
In addition
to
this
, parents and teachers in schools should teach the perils of wrongdoings
instead
of criminals. As an illustration,
academics
Change the noun form
academic
show examples
institutes should add subjects related to moral values and psychological behaviours
in
Change preposition
to
show examples
curriculum
Add an article
the curriculum
show examples
.
To conclude
,
although
criminals can
guide
the
children
as they are experienced, the best way to impart knowledge
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
good
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
is through school curriculums.
Submitted by tanvirkaur461 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • prisoners
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • consequences
  • insights
  • deterrent
  • guidance
  • support
  • role models
  • positive change
What to do next:
Look at other essays: